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Offline pRiNcess AzuLa

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Defeat
« on: December 25, 2012, 03:44:32 AM »
Defeat

Strip me of this royaL crown

The Last fortress has falLen down

Forget the tears that have been shed

Just Lay me on this fLowerbed


These Last words that I may impart

WilL disappear into the dark

Into the depths of the unknown

The stilLness of the evening grows

 

Oh wither is the victory

Of Light and Life that breathes freeLy?

My purpose, it cannot be found

My voice can bareLy make a sound

 

Oh angeLs, take me down beLow!

Where consciousness has naught to go

Towards the pLace of eternaL sLeep

Where memories are buried deep
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I was feeLing LoneLy when I  wrote this poem.
So, what do you think of it? Comments and vioLent reactions are weLcome. XD
« Last Edit: December 25, 2012, 03:47:07 AM by pRiNcess AzuLa »

Offline Water Lily

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Re: Defeat
« Reply #1 on: December 27, 2012, 05:25:45 AM »
Wow...I actually have no words.... This is truly beautiful and so...sad. I admire the inner poet within you. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more from you. Truly awesome, my friend. :3

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Re: Defeat
« Reply #2 on: December 27, 2012, 05:29:43 AM »
Oh. Highly evocative. That's how I like my poetry.

And did you mean to put it in iambic pentameter? Because I think it is in that meter, and that's super rad.
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Re: Defeat
« Reply #3 on: December 27, 2012, 05:35:48 PM »
That was beautiful. Splendidly and wonderfully done. *applause*

 

       
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